Unbroken Heart
Beat #1: Ashley is fed up with her husband, Megan and Lily is trying to be supportive yet is still trying to get her out her bad mood.
Ashley
I’m so sick of John all he wants to do is sleep. I’m getting so fed up with this marriage. He doesn’t try hard enough anymore to even try and make me happy. Being lazy is free!
Megan
ASH! You can’t stay mad forever! Sometimes you just have to talk to him and let him know, you need him to meet you half way.
Beat#2: Ashley calms down and is starting to realize she may be overreacting, Lily hesitant to speak.
Lily
Megan is right Ash!!. Anthony and I were having bad times. We were unsure about love. But after talking and finding what we had lost. We found our love and the romance we once had.
Lily
Megan
I’m pretty sure you guys are just going through a little patch that all marriages go through. Trust and believe, time heals all.
Beat#3: Ashley gets very aggravated.
Ashley stands up from table and starts to walk off.
Ashley
You can think what you want! We choose the love we think we deserve! I will not be misguided with a unbroken heart with extra luaggage for someone else.
I like how you are weaving a lot of your phrases into the script. It is hard to read with all the different colors though. I like the way the scene picks up with these friends while they are already engaged. There is no unnecessary exposition. Be sure you are using proper grammar except when you are developing character. All of the dialogue flows nicely except for the last line. It lacks clarity and is too ambiguous. Ashley's beats also do not feel true. I can believe beat #2 or #3 but there is not enough time for her to calm down and then get so angry.
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